- put climax @ beginning and reveal her character and why she's out for revenge
- flashback after that to show her past, being tortured, how she knows who he is, getting a job, working her way up, and how she gets to the current climax
- finish climax with killing and be selective about choice of where she sends the dvds to
- establish scene locations
- establish why anyone would care about patrick and his position
- work on developing karras - right now she's not well developed. she just seems violent and hollow. make the audience feel for her and fear for her (especially in torture scene) and give her a good reason and good motivation to do what she does
- question how she happens to be at the right place at the right time and know the right people to get to patrick. make her have to work harder for it and not be so simple
- stop fucking it up
- stop screwing it up
- quit being a failure
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